2. The following is an example of some student’s composition. As an English teacher, please correct this
composition, make a comment and provide your suggestions for this student.
作文練習：
說明：依提示寫一篇英文作文。
提示：雖然台灣面積不大，但每個城市都有自己獨有的特色。你覺得你所居住的城市最需要改變的地方是甚麼?請以此為題，寫一篇英文作文。第一段介紹你所居住城市的人、事、物、文化、制度、自然環境等，並說明你認為這裡需要什麼樣的改變?第二段敘述這個改變能帶給你的城市甚麼好處?
I lived in a city called Zhubei. It’s very convenient here, we have a department store, a lot of restaurant, lots of park and so on. Furthermore, there is also a beach here, when you’re filled up with stress you can take a drive to the beach to take a little rest. The wind can blow all your stress away. But the more convenient the more problems come. For example, due to the department store there was always a
traffic jam nearby. We needed to spend twice as much time as than we needed before. There is also some place need to improve is there are too many holes on the street, when we drive threw the car will jump up and down. It’s very unconfortable to drive threw and there was not only a hole on a street, there are about 2~3 holes just on a street. Above are some places that I think Zhubei needed
to improve.
 There aren’t just shortcomings in Zhubei, there’re also advantages here. Because of there’re a lot of restaurant we don’t need to think what should we eat today. There are various kind of restaurant and find stands, you can have different type of food and won’t repeat for a week. If you have a kid you can bring them to the park, there are seesaw, slide, a big place for a picnic. Parents can sit under the tree and have a little talk to each other and have rest, the kids can also have a lot of fun in the park. Taiwan isn’t big, but every city has its own special feature. There aren’t a perfect city, every city have its advantages and shortcomings, but if we improve them we can make this city better.